02-23-2014, 08:43 PM
After reading your story I remembered one good tip you could use. You should show the action seconds before it happen. Picture should not show the results, you should leave audience with unanswered questions to grab their attention. On you picture the monster already grab them, he's freaking mutant and blowing is head off does not look to harm him much. They literally dead. The end. No hope for them.
It's my personal idea you could do it totally different, but just showing the whole scene few seconds before changed mood of the story. You can build tension, maybe girl just fell down, guy is trying to help her stand up same time turning back and shoot monster and monster almost grabbing him but will the monster catch him? will shooting monster head stop it? will girl stand up? will they run away?
I also make composition base on triangle to close eye flow only around characters.
It's my personal idea you could do it totally different, but just showing the whole scene few seconds before changed mood of the story. You can build tension, maybe girl just fell down, guy is trying to help her stand up same time turning back and shoot monster and monster almost grabbing him but will the monster catch him? will shooting monster head stop it? will girl stand up? will they run away?
I also make composition base on triangle to close eye flow only around characters.