What ImSkeptical learnt this week (Sketchbook)
hey man, nice illustration. It turned out great I think. Also good for you to do the workshop. I think it is a great idea to invest in one-self.

One thing about your illustration would be that I am not sure what is actually happening. She is holding that rope and it is in a city but thats it mainly.

I think you could push the narrative and the dynamism a bit more. I did a quick overpaint to show what I mean.

First I tilted the composition since the verticals and horizontals made it too calm in my opinion and I flipped it because I wanted the main focal point on the right side. Then I pushed her inactive hand back into the shadow, so that there was a shadow hand / light hand and shadow foot / light foot. I don't know if that is something one should do, but it felt right for me :D

Then I added a weapon in her shadow hand to show some danger. After that I added feet since now with the tilted comp, her legs just ended in midair. Then I seperated the foreground a bit more by adding a screen layer between the foreground-pidgeon and her handbag. Lastly I added a saturated edge on some cast-shadows on her skin, added some light on her hand and the shadow on the ground by another person.

Still I am not sure what she is doing with the rope, but I think you have some purpose for that. Maybe sort that out, in order to make it easier to read.

On a technical side I think it is great work, but like I said, the narrative is a bit weak. Other than that I want to see more :)

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RE: What ImSkeptical learnt today (Sketchbook) - by KyleScary - 04-27-2012, 02:15 PM
RE: What ImSkeptical learnt this week (Sketchbook) - by stace - 07-16-2012, 08:25 AM
RE: What ImSkeptical learnt this week (Sketchbook) - by FOERVRAENGD - 07-23-2012, 10:30 PM
RE: What ImSkeptical learnt this week (Sketchbook) - by DanilleG - 09-11-2012, 10:17 AM
RE: What ImSkeptical learnt this week (Sketchbook) - by kevin - 09-12-2012, 12:38 AM
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