06-24-2016, 04:39 AM
I find the third panel difficult, but that mostly the layout in combination with the text. Maybe too busy with the centric lines or the text connects difficult to the image, I'm not sure. Might also become clear when everything is inked in the same way.
I don't have a problem with confusing it for a cigerette, it becomes clear in the story anyways.
With the second row, my attention goes straight to the judge and missed the first panel of that row. It is quite busy there in that area, maybe you can matte down the windshield? I don't think it is necessary to show to bag when he is clearly breaking in. An maybe breaking up the text boxes would make it clearer as well that there are different panels.. dunno...
Good luck with finishing it!
I don't have a problem with confusing it for a cigerette, it becomes clear in the story anyways.
With the second row, my attention goes straight to the judge and missed the first panel of that row. It is quite busy there in that area, maybe you can matte down the windshield? I don't think it is necessary to show to bag when he is clearly breaking in. An maybe breaking up the text boxes would make it clearer as well that there are different panels.. dunno...
Good luck with finishing it!