11-29-2012, 07:51 AM
hey man, love this new piece your doing, it has alot of potential. You've had some prity gold crits too and i thought i'd add mine and see if i could help :3
I think the problem with what you've got at the moment is like Kidult said and the composition feels abit squashed. Thats partly because you main focal points are fit in a square, and squares make boring compositions generally. They feel very static and rigid which is the opposite of what you want in this piece. Plus your composition has alot of straight lines, vertical and horizontal which add to this point. The red square kinda shows this.
Secondly, it seems your going for a very central composition, like Kidult mentioned the classic triangle/ book cover/ poster type of thing. With this being the case the light source in the top right feels out of place and it pulls too much focus onto the right of the image leaving the left kinda empty.
heres a quick paintover, hope you don't mind
All ive done is extended the image more and moved the light source. I also moved the warriors arm to the front because it looked weird behind the archer and gave the monster more depth and movement by pushing its claw forward. Something i didnt paintover but would like to mention also is the warriors narrative. What are they doing and why? The warrior seems to be screaming while the archer is kinda chilled and it's tough to tell why. The fact that their almost back to back suggest their being overwhelmed as does the guy shouting but theres no sign of anything attacking them, part from the monster. Though that looks like its sneaking up on them, in which case surely the archer would see him.
Despite this it looks really awesome so far, i hope you follow it through to finish because i would love to see it completed! And i hope my long ramblings helped.
I think the problem with what you've got at the moment is like Kidult said and the composition feels abit squashed. Thats partly because you main focal points are fit in a square, and squares make boring compositions generally. They feel very static and rigid which is the opposite of what you want in this piece. Plus your composition has alot of straight lines, vertical and horizontal which add to this point. The red square kinda shows this.
Secondly, it seems your going for a very central composition, like Kidult mentioned the classic triangle/ book cover/ poster type of thing. With this being the case the light source in the top right feels out of place and it pulls too much focus onto the right of the image leaving the left kinda empty.
heres a quick paintover, hope you don't mind
All ive done is extended the image more and moved the light source. I also moved the warriors arm to the front because it looked weird behind the archer and gave the monster more depth and movement by pushing its claw forward. Something i didnt paintover but would like to mention also is the warriors narrative. What are they doing and why? The warrior seems to be screaming while the archer is kinda chilled and it's tough to tell why. The fact that their almost back to back suggest their being overwhelmed as does the guy shouting but theres no sign of anything attacking them, part from the monster. Though that looks like its sneaking up on them, in which case surely the archer would see him.
Despite this it looks really awesome so far, i hope you follow it through to finish because i would love to see it completed! And i hope my long ramblings helped.