10-09-2015, 12:52 AM
Hey I like these, especially like the horse head in the foreground and the light/dark rythms on the dunes, it's cool that you've thought out some back story too, makes for a cool theme when working through them.
I think that once you cover these more so there's less white visible, they'll read much better.
The only advice I can give is that on the first one, you could suggest more distance by reducing the size of the dunes as they recede, like you have in the last image.
I'd treat them like any other repeating element and just reduce them, so that they're tiny when they hit the horizon.
This is a good example of what I mean;
https://yourmoroccotour.files.wordpress....-dunes.jpg
And perhaps cut into that grassy edge in the foreground to contrast that shape against the softer curves behind it, I know it's meant to be clumpy sand, if it's that close that we can see stalks of grass, I'd go with less variation to its curves, or if you're going really choppy, more grass might help set it apart?
Other than that, I'd probably try and fade the greys out from the foreground to the back, so there's a nice gradual fade as the dune recede into the distance.
On the cityscape one, and maybe in the tunnel too, you could throw in a second focal point by maybe adding some relevant street furniture, roadworks kinda thing or just utility boxes, maybe a warning sign, or a cable or something hanging in the foreground in the tunnel.
Plus on the cityscape, you could add some more shapes on the rooftops, to give a more interesting skyline, like buildings always have those aircon/plant room things on, aerials in the such, and you could wreck some of the corners and litter the street with just random shapes to reinforce the post apocolyptic feel of it.
The tunnel again, you could use the light from the train to take care of the lighting, so it can shine forward and light up the track to a point and then fade to darker again as it nears us ?
Damn, I've waffled for ages, but these are just my initial thoughts, I'm working on all this stuff myself so take everything I say with a pinch of salt! hope some it helps in some way, be cool to see them finished.
I think that once you cover these more so there's less white visible, they'll read much better.
The only advice I can give is that on the first one, you could suggest more distance by reducing the size of the dunes as they recede, like you have in the last image.
I'd treat them like any other repeating element and just reduce them, so that they're tiny when they hit the horizon.
This is a good example of what I mean;
https://yourmoroccotour.files.wordpress....-dunes.jpg
And perhaps cut into that grassy edge in the foreground to contrast that shape against the softer curves behind it, I know it's meant to be clumpy sand, if it's that close that we can see stalks of grass, I'd go with less variation to its curves, or if you're going really choppy, more grass might help set it apart?
Other than that, I'd probably try and fade the greys out from the foreground to the back, so there's a nice gradual fade as the dune recede into the distance.
On the cityscape one, and maybe in the tunnel too, you could throw in a second focal point by maybe adding some relevant street furniture, roadworks kinda thing or just utility boxes, maybe a warning sign, or a cable or something hanging in the foreground in the tunnel.
Plus on the cityscape, you could add some more shapes on the rooftops, to give a more interesting skyline, like buildings always have those aircon/plant room things on, aerials in the such, and you could wreck some of the corners and litter the street with just random shapes to reinforce the post apocolyptic feel of it.
The tunnel again, you could use the light from the train to take care of the lighting, so it can shine forward and light up the track to a point and then fade to darker again as it nears us ?
Damn, I've waffled for ages, but these are just my initial thoughts, I'm working on all this stuff myself so take everything I say with a pinch of salt! hope some it helps in some way, be cool to see them finished.