05-22-2016, 01:03 PM
Nice progress ^.^
I feel the comp is a little too closed in. By that I mean, the scene doesn't really show us too much about the narrative. Perhaps you could just extend the canvas wider a bit to fit a more cinematic aspect (1.85-2.35 :1 ) which will allow you to get perhaps a bit more of what they are looking at? Perhaps they also entered through the roof, so adding ropes or ladders or something might help add to the narrative. Funnily enough it feels like a still frame in an animation :P so I can feel there are other frames before and after this one, which would be a great establishing shot instead. This is great from an animation perspective, probably not as great for a single shot illustration in terms of power.
In terms of rendering, it's nice, though definitely could be tightened up. Your colours are pretty cold. Consider adding some bright warms to your direct lit areas to give it a feeling of hot sun more and contrast against everything else which is very cool. Atey's work is a perfect reference to use to check out shafts of direct lit sunlight against shadow!
I feel the comp is a little too closed in. By that I mean, the scene doesn't really show us too much about the narrative. Perhaps you could just extend the canvas wider a bit to fit a more cinematic aspect (1.85-2.35 :1 ) which will allow you to get perhaps a bit more of what they are looking at? Perhaps they also entered through the roof, so adding ropes or ladders or something might help add to the narrative. Funnily enough it feels like a still frame in an animation :P so I can feel there are other frames before and after this one, which would be a great establishing shot instead. This is great from an animation perspective, probably not as great for a single shot illustration in terms of power.
In terms of rendering, it's nice, though definitely could be tightened up. Your colours are pretty cold. Consider adding some bright warms to your direct lit areas to give it a feeling of hot sun more and contrast against everything else which is very cool. Atey's work is a perfect reference to use to check out shafts of direct lit sunlight against shadow!