06-12-2016, 07:48 AM
Hey Jonny! Great push off. Quick critique. I hope it's legible enough..
Just to add. The bigger space you give a panel, the more 'time' the moment has... In your 4th to 6th panels (or 7th, if the person in jail counts as a separate panel), given the real estate you provided for each, the guy getting carjacked has more weight to the story than the rest because it feels like you've given the scene more page time.. Not sure if this is your intention. But as a reader, that's what I see.
It's shaping up real good!
EDIT: These are just suggestions! They are probably bad advice!
EDIT 2: 10in (267mm) x 7.5in (178mm) are the new dimensions for the comic!
Just to add. The bigger space you give a panel, the more 'time' the moment has... In your 4th to 6th panels (or 7th, if the person in jail counts as a separate panel), given the real estate you provided for each, the guy getting carjacked has more weight to the story than the rest because it feels like you've given the scene more page time.. Not sure if this is your intention. But as a reader, that's what I see.
It's shaping up real good!
EDIT: These are just suggestions! They are probably bad advice!
EDIT 2: 10in (267mm) x 7.5in (178mm) are the new dimensions for the comic!
If you are reading this, I most likely just gave you a crappy crit! What I'm basically trying to say is, don't give up!
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