06-14-2016, 11:53 AM
Welcome to the forum! It's a really sweet story, I like it a lot! Reading your description it seemed like a lot to fit in one page, but from the rough it looks like it's ok. I think making the dragon hunter girl and the young girl clearly the same person is crucial in this (like some kind of hair accessory or something that's quickly noticable). Good luck! Looking forward to see more.