06-16-2016, 12:06 PM
I like the script! it's a sweet story. I think the panel with the mom you could draw the kid instead, give us more time to 'get to know' him, and have her voice coming from off-screen, if she's saying something typically mom-like about going to school it'll be fine and obvious who she is. Also, remember in comics to lead the viewer's eye where to look next - you just want something pointing in the direction where the next panel to be read is (can be a horizon line, the edge of a desk / bed, even a character just looking in that direction) - you did it for some of the frames. Looking forward to seeing your progress ^^