11-24-2016, 05:48 AM
Cool updates. I like this last one, especially. Very Jana-esque in process.
As for a crit: I think the angle of her back and the way things align with the breastplate are creating a flattened contour/space. In part, it's due to the way the edge of the plate aligns with her sash in value, creating this tangent of sorts. The breastplate would also have a lot more volume around the chest cavity, creating a stronger contour in relation to her hips positioning.
I'm not the best with perspective, but the skewing from the chest down seems a bit forced, and it gives this slight distortion to her proportions/ accessories that feels unnatural. Another thing that seems off with the perspective is that her body is being pushed back into space, as if we're looking at her from a down angle. The sun is setting behind her, which creates a confusing parallel with the sun and herself. I understand being in the sky is already a vague place to position a character in, and it's great thinking to use an anchor point to associate her with, but it doesn't work with the perspectives concept.
I did a quick paintover to illustrate a few of these points. It's very crude. Haha. But yeah, the legs still don't really look right. Hope this might be helpful. Color and light is on point, everything else aside. :D
As for a crit: I think the angle of her back and the way things align with the breastplate are creating a flattened contour/space. In part, it's due to the way the edge of the plate aligns with her sash in value, creating this tangent of sorts. The breastplate would also have a lot more volume around the chest cavity, creating a stronger contour in relation to her hips positioning.
I'm not the best with perspective, but the skewing from the chest down seems a bit forced, and it gives this slight distortion to her proportions/ accessories that feels unnatural. Another thing that seems off with the perspective is that her body is being pushed back into space, as if we're looking at her from a down angle. The sun is setting behind her, which creates a confusing parallel with the sun and herself. I understand being in the sky is already a vague place to position a character in, and it's great thinking to use an anchor point to associate her with, but it doesn't work with the perspectives concept.
I did a quick paintover to illustrate a few of these points. It's very crude. Haha. But yeah, the legs still don't really look right. Hope this might be helpful. Color and light is on point, everything else aside. :D