Them sketchies

[Fedodika]

Here I did you a quick write up. I've been studying composition a lot lately, mainly by just writing things on top of paintings I like and seeing what I think works. The image I posted first with the kind of forest town, it's way too busy. The animals are running: story. Someone is buying something: story, the guy coming to town: Story, the girls reading: Story. These can all be a painting on their own.

Now with time, you'll be able to work something like that into a scene, but right now, the way the background is arranged with all these little details, it's just too busy, there is too much happening so it looks cluttered. The elements are too close together and there's basically just two small slivers of space that has no detail. 

For the flower piece, the biggest problem is the arrangement of shapes. It's basically just a few squares. The figures are all the same height, the same basic silhouette, and the scene doesn't really make sense. Like, there's this big flower that's above them that is uncomfortably close, and the characters seem lost but at the same time there is this big gust of wind on the ground which makes no sense. The characters seem oblivious to the other elements, like they aren't reacting to the wind or the massive strange flower, both of which could dramatically affect the characters poses and reactions. I know you could say the flower provides light to read the map, but you know, it's just not very interesting at this angle in particular. 

Now your colors and character designs are great, as you know and have heard many times, I do think it's good you're trying a bit tougher of a composition with multiple figures. I would highly recommend doing some studies of people you look up to, not painting or drawing their work, but just writing down what is working in the scenes, find the big shapes, make notes etc on top of their work. you'll learn very quick, I promise ;). Also thumbnail moar <3