05-10-2017, 01:37 AM
I don't know the scene, but it really seems nice from your takes on it! I like the brushwork in the first one a lot, and the reflection of light in the second one.
As I haven't seen the movie I don't know what that scene is about, but I suppose it has a calm mood? If I'm right, maybe those diagonal reflections are a bit distracting, because they imply action. And also generelly, because I wouldn't know why some of the reflections are vertical, and some diagonal. And there seem to be two light sources, but every object only has one shadow, which is a bit confusing.
If I want to focus on clarity and simplifiying I like to draw a scene quickly and then ask someone who didn't know it what it's about. I felt that really helped me personally.
As I haven't seen the movie I don't know what that scene is about, but I suppose it has a calm mood? If I'm right, maybe those diagonal reflections are a bit distracting, because they imply action. And also generelly, because I wouldn't know why some of the reflections are vertical, and some diagonal. And there seem to be two light sources, but every object only has one shadow, which is a bit confusing.
If I want to focus on clarity and simplifiying I like to draw a scene quickly and then ask someone who didn't know it what it's about. I felt that really helped me personally.