07-30-2017, 08:15 PM
Heya man, just gonna talk on the technique, since the panel layout is pretty straightforward, and no dialogue.
i find the rushed speedpaint aesthetic works nicely when it has a pleasing and well thought out balance of soft and hard edges. I don't think you manage it so far in these pages so most of the panels end up looking blurry or 'unfinished'. You use hard edges mostly, but in a fairly sloppy way which often flattens the depth or draws unwanted attention. Example first time we see the main yellow dude which should be an intriguing important establishing shot, the main payoff is the figure which is a messy yellow blob surrounded by wonky architecture, and he has no face! Another is the multi kill strip....it is hard to tell what is going on even though i know what it's supposed to be. figures are real sloppy.
Check out ghostblade by wlop for good examples of speedpainty quick style panels, but precise control of edges and focal points to create a more finished appeal.
While you definitely shouldn't wait till you 'are good enough' you might want to consider working on the aesthetic a bit more before you continue. Maybe trial out several different specific techniques or looks on a single panel or page first, before you apply to the whole comic. At the moment, aesthetically it feels like you aren't 'finishing' any of the panels and detracted from my enjoyment of the story. I'd also recommend line drawing the panels if you aren't to at least be able to get a bit more precise with your painting in areas where it may be needed, even if you end up hiding the linework
i find the rushed speedpaint aesthetic works nicely when it has a pleasing and well thought out balance of soft and hard edges. I don't think you manage it so far in these pages so most of the panels end up looking blurry or 'unfinished'. You use hard edges mostly, but in a fairly sloppy way which often flattens the depth or draws unwanted attention. Example first time we see the main yellow dude which should be an intriguing important establishing shot, the main payoff is the figure which is a messy yellow blob surrounded by wonky architecture, and he has no face! Another is the multi kill strip....it is hard to tell what is going on even though i know what it's supposed to be. figures are real sloppy.
Check out ghostblade by wlop for good examples of speedpainty quick style panels, but precise control of edges and focal points to create a more finished appeal.
While you definitely shouldn't wait till you 'are good enough' you might want to consider working on the aesthetic a bit more before you continue. Maybe trial out several different specific techniques or looks on a single panel or page first, before you apply to the whole comic. At the moment, aesthetically it feels like you aren't 'finishing' any of the panels and detracted from my enjoyment of the story. I'd also recommend line drawing the panels if you aren't to at least be able to get a bit more precise with your painting in areas where it may be needed, even if you end up hiding the linework