09-02-2012, 05:44 PM
Hey James, keep up the great work, you're doin great. Only thing is on those story boards, while they do look great, it's not really clear what's going on. I would try to plan those out a little better and make sure it's a little more readable.
Like in scene two you got the guy looking in the closet for clothes right? There are no clothes in the closet? And then in scene three he's putting on his shirt? He finds a hole in it, or? And then in scene four it seems maybe he has given up? But then in scene five he has a shirt on? With a few changes here and there to the key poses/drawings I think you can make it a lot more readable.
Like in scene two you got the guy looking in the closet for clothes right? There are no clothes in the closet? And then in scene three he's putting on his shirt? He finds a hole in it, or? And then in scene four it seems maybe he has given up? But then in scene five he has a shirt on? With a few changes here and there to the key poses/drawings I think you can make it a lot more readable.