07-30-2018, 12:41 AM
the lighting youre adding doesnt look as if it exists in the environment shes in. I mean its not inherently wrong to use artificial lighting outdoors but it'll usually still interact with the environment. Typically if the water is as blue as youve indicated, it will have some sort of effect on the objects nearby. The lighting youre using looks as if its from an artificial source and it has very little color for instance in her hair shadows which are black.
Id reccomend finding some well lit beach photos, femjoy has tons of them, much better than your average "person on the beach" google search. The lily pads are out of perspective behind her, as the way we appear to be seeing her is conflicting with how the lily pads are sitting, its as if they are in two different vanishing points. I believe in order to see the lily pads (which are strangely in the ocean and i believe they are more a freshwater occurence) You'd have to hold the camera above her, but we are looking directly at her. Im assuming this is the ocean since there are seagulls and the water is very blue.
Also the seagull behind her is very clearly not referenced and doesnt look very good. Im not really sure what he adds to the scene either. Try to think less is more on these things, why are the seagulls behind her flying? What do the mountains in the back add to the scene? the boat? Why is her face so... average in attractiveness? Why are her neck muscles so visible, where are her oblique muscles? Again you may have tweaked the pose a little, but it is still not helping the overall composition, its only 0.5% more dynamic. You'd have to recreate the scene to get the dynamic pose im talking about. Killing your darlings isn't a big loss if you'll only waste time rendering something that wont make something a great image by the time youre done.
Try to make something that really wows you and others on just the initial sketch, then try to preserve that life and excitement throughout the process of rendering, less is more :)
Id reccomend finding some well lit beach photos, femjoy has tons of them, much better than your average "person on the beach" google search. The lily pads are out of perspective behind her, as the way we appear to be seeing her is conflicting with how the lily pads are sitting, its as if they are in two different vanishing points. I believe in order to see the lily pads (which are strangely in the ocean and i believe they are more a freshwater occurence) You'd have to hold the camera above her, but we are looking directly at her. Im assuming this is the ocean since there are seagulls and the water is very blue.
Also the seagull behind her is very clearly not referenced and doesnt look very good. Im not really sure what he adds to the scene either. Try to think less is more on these things, why are the seagulls behind her flying? What do the mountains in the back add to the scene? the boat? Why is her face so... average in attractiveness? Why are her neck muscles so visible, where are her oblique muscles? Again you may have tweaked the pose a little, but it is still not helping the overall composition, its only 0.5% more dynamic. You'd have to recreate the scene to get the dynamic pose im talking about. Killing your darlings isn't a big loss if you'll only waste time rendering something that wont make something a great image by the time youre done.
Try to make something that really wows you and others on just the initial sketch, then try to preserve that life and excitement throughout the process of rendering, less is more :)
70+Page Koala Sketchbook: http://crimsondaggers.com/forum/thread-3465.html SB
Paintover thread, submit for crits! http://crimsondaggers.com/forum/thread-7879.html
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Paintover thread, submit for crits! http://crimsondaggers.com/forum/thread-7879.html
[color=rgba(255, 255, 255, 0.882)]e owl sat on an oak. The more he saw, the less he spoke.[/color]