10-14-2019, 06:39 PM
Nice colors on the back of the painted horse! You got me drawing some horses as well (but I didn't post them), so thanks for the inspiration.
For the comic, I also have some suggestions:
I was confused in the 1st panel, I thought the boy was tired, so I like the close up of the second panel in the 1st version.
Then the 2 panels next to each other could be "Again?" and "Please?" but maybe a bit bigger. Or if you keep the 1st version of that 3rd/4th panel, I think it would be more clear if you flipped it, so "Again?" is in the top left.
For the 5th and 6th panel, I like the flow of the text of the 2nd version. The boy (5th panel) could be in a more interesting pose/silhouette. I like the idea that the transformation gets confirmed in the second scene, but I agree it might get confusing.
I think it's coming along quite nicely, just some more exploration to get that flow.
For the comic, I also have some suggestions:
I was confused in the 1st panel, I thought the boy was tired, so I like the close up of the second panel in the 1st version.
Then the 2 panels next to each other could be "Again?" and "Please?" but maybe a bit bigger. Or if you keep the 1st version of that 3rd/4th panel, I think it would be more clear if you flipped it, so "Again?" is in the top left.
For the 5th and 6th panel, I like the flow of the text of the 2nd version. The boy (5th panel) could be in a more interesting pose/silhouette. I like the idea that the transformation gets confirmed in the second scene, but I agree it might get confusing.
I think it's coming along quite nicely, just some more exploration to get that flow.
