10-15-2019, 10:47 AM
Thank you Ash! Horses are creatures of fascinating weirdness, eh? :P
The comic draft was visually not clear enough indeed, I think I should post the scripts in addition to the drafts, as well as some background information. It crossed my mind to swap the diagonal panels until I realized this would be a brutal 180 degree angle turn at the very start of the story when we are still wondering who is who. Difficult decision. Also, I wasn't happy with the pre-shapeshifting panel indeed, too bland, botched, you're totally right.
I didn't find the time to work on this last weekend except exploring a bit the alternate beginning that I alluded to the other time. This is a tentative vertical mode long-scrolling first "panel" which I abandoned midway because of how narrow and suffocating it looked. I would really prefer the landscape slide show format. I am posting it just as an testimony of the trials and errors:
To provide a guideline, below is an old draft of this beginning, in a square page format. It was made some time after I gave up on comics, some kind of a last breath, not very appealing but it tells the story. I spent an insane amount of time translating it into English (and yet the texts probably look awkward) and the speech balloons were not always fit:
The comic draft was visually not clear enough indeed, I think I should post the scripts in addition to the drafts, as well as some background information. It crossed my mind to swap the diagonal panels until I realized this would be a brutal 180 degree angle turn at the very start of the story when we are still wondering who is who. Difficult decision. Also, I wasn't happy with the pre-shapeshifting panel indeed, too bland, botched, you're totally right.
I didn't find the time to work on this last weekend except exploring a bit the alternate beginning that I alluded to the other time. This is a tentative vertical mode long-scrolling first "panel" which I abandoned midway because of how narrow and suffocating it looked. I would really prefer the landscape slide show format. I am posting it just as an testimony of the trials and errors:
To provide a guideline, below is an old draft of this beginning, in a square page format. It was made some time after I gave up on comics, some kind of a last breath, not very appealing but it tells the story. I spent an insane amount of time translating it into English (and yet the texts probably look awkward) and the speech balloons were not always fit: