12-22-2022, 10:15 PM
Hey there,
Congrats on your new piece, it looks really cool and I like the comp, theme and feel of it a lot! The colors are really working great as well, good job on that.
If you dont mind I have a few things to critique, maybe you agree or you could disregard it.
So my first point would be her bow. It feels very 2d, very flat. You have a gradient from front to back so to speak but there is no information on the form across it. it‘s such a focal point of the image but is definitely one of the weakest areas in the whole painting. Even the leaves in the corner are painted better, so Id urge you to think about detail placement and visual interest. The bow is calling for attention but when you look there is nothing there. Try thinking of ways you can show form and detail and if you have to alter the design in order to do that, so be it. If you want more realism, With bows you often see exactly how the bowstring is attached and the place where your hand goes is often designed a little different from the other parts. Since the form would need work, you want to place the higlights more precisely and have the light fall off describing the form better. Maybe it would even help seeing the spikes on the other side of the bow as well following perspective, which might help explain the design better. Ok.
Second biggest problem for me is the blur on the main character. Im really having difficulty with it and it makes the image look a little amateur-ish imo. The wolf is in full motion and sharp and her arm is only pulling back a bowstring and is super blurred. Maybe it‘s a taste thing but i dont recall seeing this type of stuff in a professional piece of art either. I mean its great to experiement with these things, but I wanted to let you know how it comes across to me.
My third point of critique would be the inconsitent lighting, i know it‘s hard to make all of it up and it takes discipline to paint it evenly throughout the image, but it sticks out. So just comparing the light source direction from where her leather corset is lit and her green dress above it is lit, not seeing any kind of cast shadow of her arm or her breast (which is quite big from the way you rendered it) is giving me problems. Comparing that to her right leg which is almost lit more from underneath with a big shadow on top is again sticking out to me. I like how you treated each material differently, but would encourage you to do some leather studies, to nail down that material in particular a little better. And really understanding your light sources, maybe plotting them out more, drawing lines where the light hits and where it doesnt or just keeping it in mind more would help. Good reference always makes a huge difference of course but i dont know if youre into that.
Alright sorry for the long reply, again I really like what youve done here. Here face has great detail, the pose of the wolf is very cool and you framed it all really well with the architecture in the back. The background with the clouds and even the castle is incredible, I think thats all superb and fits the image really well. The things to improve on are form, lighting and with it, material rendering, like the stone texture could be improved upon and is a little distracting here and there but its somewhat minor Id say.
Again great job, keep it up and for now happy holidays!
Congrats on your new piece, it looks really cool and I like the comp, theme and feel of it a lot! The colors are really working great as well, good job on that.
If you dont mind I have a few things to critique, maybe you agree or you could disregard it.
So my first point would be her bow. It feels very 2d, very flat. You have a gradient from front to back so to speak but there is no information on the form across it. it‘s such a focal point of the image but is definitely one of the weakest areas in the whole painting. Even the leaves in the corner are painted better, so Id urge you to think about detail placement and visual interest. The bow is calling for attention but when you look there is nothing there. Try thinking of ways you can show form and detail and if you have to alter the design in order to do that, so be it. If you want more realism, With bows you often see exactly how the bowstring is attached and the place where your hand goes is often designed a little different from the other parts. Since the form would need work, you want to place the higlights more precisely and have the light fall off describing the form better. Maybe it would even help seeing the spikes on the other side of the bow as well following perspective, which might help explain the design better. Ok.
Second biggest problem for me is the blur on the main character. Im really having difficulty with it and it makes the image look a little amateur-ish imo. The wolf is in full motion and sharp and her arm is only pulling back a bowstring and is super blurred. Maybe it‘s a taste thing but i dont recall seeing this type of stuff in a professional piece of art either. I mean its great to experiement with these things, but I wanted to let you know how it comes across to me.
My third point of critique would be the inconsitent lighting, i know it‘s hard to make all of it up and it takes discipline to paint it evenly throughout the image, but it sticks out. So just comparing the light source direction from where her leather corset is lit and her green dress above it is lit, not seeing any kind of cast shadow of her arm or her breast (which is quite big from the way you rendered it) is giving me problems. Comparing that to her right leg which is almost lit more from underneath with a big shadow on top is again sticking out to me. I like how you treated each material differently, but would encourage you to do some leather studies, to nail down that material in particular a little better. And really understanding your light sources, maybe plotting them out more, drawing lines where the light hits and where it doesnt or just keeping it in mind more would help. Good reference always makes a huge difference of course but i dont know if youre into that.
Alright sorry for the long reply, again I really like what youve done here. Here face has great detail, the pose of the wolf is very cool and you framed it all really well with the architecture in the back. The background with the clouds and even the castle is incredible, I think thats all superb and fits the image really well. The things to improve on are form, lighting and with it, material rendering, like the stone texture could be improved upon and is a little distracting here and there but its somewhat minor Id say.
Again great job, keep it up and for now happy holidays!