05-12-2013, 05:08 AM
I think I can see a couple problems, but I'm no expert, and I know I won't hit everything.
First, the direction of the light and the direction of the shadow it's casting behind the main character don't match. Draw a straight line from the light source through the character to see what I mean. And the cone of light seems to get more round as it hits the character. I would maybe get some reference of spotlights being pointed toward a camera. It also kind of looks like a hole for some reason; maybe hint at the support structure for the spotlight or something?
Second, the lady in the balcony isn't going to catch any light right now. Really, she should be in shadow. Maybe if you had some sort of secondary lighting mounted on the columns, she could be mostly in shadow but still catch rim lighting or something.
Finally, I think the place my eyes go to first is the spotlight, then maybe the back of the girl's head. If this is an illustration about the characters, that's where the emphasis should be. Faces and hands are the most important and expressive things to show when painting characters. So right now, we've got one face, really, really far away, no hands, and the back of someone's head. I feel like if you're going to do this kind of confrontational image, where one character is looming over another, you need to crop in a lot tighter. Position the camera right behind the character in the foreground and show us what she's seeing: the bright light in her eyes, the expression on the other character's face, make it less about the opera house. Maybe you could turn her head just a little bit so we can see a little of her face, maybe she would sheild her eyes from the light, wave her hands expressively while singing, flip this lady the bird, whatever, just so we get a little interest in the main character. Oh, and her right upper arm is a little short, make it the same length as the left.
Hope that helped. Keep it up!
First, the direction of the light and the direction of the shadow it's casting behind the main character don't match. Draw a straight line from the light source through the character to see what I mean. And the cone of light seems to get more round as it hits the character. I would maybe get some reference of spotlights being pointed toward a camera. It also kind of looks like a hole for some reason; maybe hint at the support structure for the spotlight or something?
Second, the lady in the balcony isn't going to catch any light right now. Really, she should be in shadow. Maybe if you had some sort of secondary lighting mounted on the columns, she could be mostly in shadow but still catch rim lighting or something.
Finally, I think the place my eyes go to first is the spotlight, then maybe the back of the girl's head. If this is an illustration about the characters, that's where the emphasis should be. Faces and hands are the most important and expressive things to show when painting characters. So right now, we've got one face, really, really far away, no hands, and the back of someone's head. I feel like if you're going to do this kind of confrontational image, where one character is looming over another, you need to crop in a lot tighter. Position the camera right behind the character in the foreground and show us what she's seeing: the bright light in her eyes, the expression on the other character's face, make it less about the opera house. Maybe you could turn her head just a little bit so we can see a little of her face, maybe she would sheild her eyes from the light, wave her hands expressively while singing, flip this lady the bird, whatever, just so we get a little interest in the main character. Oh, and her right upper arm is a little short, make it the same length as the left.
Hope that helped. Keep it up!