Soooo, crit please?
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Hello lake7less,
I found the mood and atmosphere of your image very striking, however I could not figure out the what some of the elements on your image are supposed to be. Since you did not provide an explanation for the image I can only assess the image purely as a composition of elements.

The first thing I would point out is that you have arranged your values and edges to point the viewer to an area of the image that has no visual interest. I created a small drawing to illustrate my point. The second issue I would bring to your attention is the presence of the linear element in the foreground. This 'line' creates a visual tangent with the border of the image moving our focus out of frame, and it also bisects the image strangely. I would suggest removing that element entirely from the image, to help create balance.

Included with the illustration is a small thumbnail drawing of a possible approach to the image where the mysterious form in the background is accentuated to become the focal point. It is only one of many solutions that are possible, and I would urge you to try out a few more as well.

Lastly I would advise you to keep in mind that, in general, the areas of highest contrast/ sharpest edges, are usually reserved for the focal point. Generating thumbnail sketches using 3 to 5 values helps to find an optimal solution with minimal effort, before painting begins. Thumbnails also simplify problems so they are easier to tackle. Hope this helps and good luck.


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Soooo, crit please? - by lake7less - 07-06-2013, 04:18 PM
RE: Soooo, crit please? - by JavierP - 07-09-2013, 06:55 PM
RE: Soooo, crit please? - by lake7less - 07-10-2013, 12:44 AM
RE: Soooo, crit please? - by Amit Dutta - 07-10-2013, 08:38 PM
RE: Soooo, crit please? - by lake7less - 07-10-2013, 09:44 PM
RE: Soooo, crit please? - by Amit Dutta - 07-10-2013, 09:58 PM
RE: Soooo, crit please? - by lake7less - 07-11-2013, 12:56 AM
RE: Soooo, crit please? - by Amit Dutta - 07-11-2013, 05:47 AM
RE: Soooo, crit please? - by lake7less - 07-11-2013, 08:02 AM
RE: Soooo, crit please? - by Amit Dutta - 07-11-2013, 05:55 PM

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