09-07-2014, 05:07 AM
Big ol' crit for ya buddy!
First, I'm gonna say that I do love this piece so far. I changed/added a lot but I think you are already on a great track.
The first big thing I noticed is that this is a giant queen spider and this is her lair but, there are almost no spiderwebs anywhere. There is the bit the girl is being spun in and that is pretty much it. So I started putting some spider webs all about the cave, treating them as comp tools to frame the area of interest as well as help lead the eye. Then I was looking at the legs and how they fan out and I think you're fond of that so I tried to keep it. But it didn't look like she was standing on anything in particular and it occurred to me that could just be in her web. Conveniently helping the narrative of her catching the girl. I also spread the under lighting on the rock because it was causing a tangent with the web
Now for the ladies themselves. I assumed the girl isn't just really fond of spiders and is actually under a trance, which I like. The first thing I thought of was that scene in Jungle Book when Ka is hypnotizing Mowgli and both of their eyes are going nuts. I didn't quite go that direct but I tried to pull the same idea in. Linking their eyes together in some visual way. I used the green you have in the background to make the eyes really pop. There are a lot of ways to actually do this idea so just go with whatever you like the most I think. I would suggest making the queen's pupils smaller though, it makes her more predatory. I also put some patterns on the queen's body. I tried to mimic the base shapes in her face, repeating the eyes and eyebrows. The first set of spider legs conveniently act as her mandibles(which she is missing one of!). I also put some rings on her legs here and there, mostly just so that the leg coming into the foreground is a little easier to read. You can do whatever pattern here you'd like if you don't like what I did, but try to fill that big space without pulling attention from their faces. In retrospect, you could do patterns on the human part of her as well.
Knock her out, Sam! You got thiiiis!
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First, I'm gonna say that I do love this piece so far. I changed/added a lot but I think you are already on a great track.
The first big thing I noticed is that this is a giant queen spider and this is her lair but, there are almost no spiderwebs anywhere. There is the bit the girl is being spun in and that is pretty much it. So I started putting some spider webs all about the cave, treating them as comp tools to frame the area of interest as well as help lead the eye. Then I was looking at the legs and how they fan out and I think you're fond of that so I tried to keep it. But it didn't look like she was standing on anything in particular and it occurred to me that could just be in her web. Conveniently helping the narrative of her catching the girl. I also spread the under lighting on the rock because it was causing a tangent with the web
Now for the ladies themselves. I assumed the girl isn't just really fond of spiders and is actually under a trance, which I like. The first thing I thought of was that scene in Jungle Book when Ka is hypnotizing Mowgli and both of their eyes are going nuts. I didn't quite go that direct but I tried to pull the same idea in. Linking their eyes together in some visual way. I used the green you have in the background to make the eyes really pop. There are a lot of ways to actually do this idea so just go with whatever you like the most I think. I would suggest making the queen's pupils smaller though, it makes her more predatory. I also put some patterns on the queen's body. I tried to mimic the base shapes in her face, repeating the eyes and eyebrows. The first set of spider legs conveniently act as her mandibles(which she is missing one of!). I also put some rings on her legs here and there, mostly just so that the leg coming into the foreground is a little easier to read. You can do whatever pattern here you'd like if you don't like what I did, but try to fill that big space without pulling attention from their faces. In retrospect, you could do patterns on the human part of her as well.
Knock her out, Sam! You got thiiiis!