09-16-2014, 10:31 AM
Hey smrr, its a good start but theres some things that are holding it back in my opinion.
As Fedodika already said, the contrast in value and saturation needs some adjusting, if not in the clouds then at least in the dragon/girl.
Also, which is the one that's the focus here? Is the dragon the part you want to showcase or the girl? Not that they're exclusive but they should either have equal footing or one be dominant over the other, especially in terms of detail. Because both have a lot of detail in them they're kind of competing information wise, but then the contrast and size is heavily in favor of the dragon's head. The title indicates to me that the girl is what's important for you, yet she is tiny in the painting and compositionally doesn't have a whole lot leading you to her.
You could create an interesting relationship between them by emphasizing one over the other a bit more dramatically. For example creating a composition thats very much about the dragon, but having the rider be small and unassuming further away, with less detail and less rendered out. Or you could do something like Maciej's dragon pieces, which generally put them on equal footing in terms of importance (compositionally and story-telling..ly)
http://tinyurl.com/pn8n7hj
http://tiger1313.deviantart.com/art/Lair-258184604
Im not saying completely revamp your comp, but maybe a zoom in would benefit both characters. Lastly watch out for the weird shapes merging into each other, specifically his horn and her torso. Moving his head a bit could help this
Anyways just my two cents, feel free to disregard if you disagree. Good luck with wrapping it up and printing it!
As Fedodika already said, the contrast in value and saturation needs some adjusting, if not in the clouds then at least in the dragon/girl.
Also, which is the one that's the focus here? Is the dragon the part you want to showcase or the girl? Not that they're exclusive but they should either have equal footing or one be dominant over the other, especially in terms of detail. Because both have a lot of detail in them they're kind of competing information wise, but then the contrast and size is heavily in favor of the dragon's head. The title indicates to me that the girl is what's important for you, yet she is tiny in the painting and compositionally doesn't have a whole lot leading you to her.
You could create an interesting relationship between them by emphasizing one over the other a bit more dramatically. For example creating a composition thats very much about the dragon, but having the rider be small and unassuming further away, with less detail and less rendered out. Or you could do something like Maciej's dragon pieces, which generally put them on equal footing in terms of importance (compositionally and story-telling..ly)
http://tinyurl.com/pn8n7hj
http://tiger1313.deviantart.com/art/Lair-258184604
Im not saying completely revamp your comp, but maybe a zoom in would benefit both characters. Lastly watch out for the weird shapes merging into each other, specifically his horn and her torso. Moving his head a bit could help this
Anyways just my two cents, feel free to disregard if you disagree. Good luck with wrapping it up and printing it!