10-15-2014, 08:26 AM
Hey man, I assume this is for the competition?
One of the issues I see is with the pose / gesture itself. Foreshortening is key when it comes to showing off that dynamic movement and right now I think there are some slight foreshortening issues with the foreground arm and the rear leg.
Also be extra careful about limbs that are hidden by the body or something else, like that raised arm as they can really muddy up the silhouette and feel a bit disconnected quite easily. Sometimes just moving a bit of an elbow or forearm into view can help. I find that your pose could read much better by paying attention to that.
In general feedback I find that your composition and pose are quite similar to the splash art for Olaf, but dialed down in power quite a bit. The bulkiness aspect is really about relative proportions. So again looking at the image below, note the distinct V shape of the trapezius and general ratio of shoulder to hip width which I think is much more exaggerated than in yours.
![[Image: Olaf_0.jpg]](http://ddragon.leagueoflegends.com/cdn/img/champion/splash/Olaf_0.jpg)
Note the foreshortening and dynamic diagonal comp (though to be honest I'm not sure the artist nailed that foreground arm completely). Your comp is much more vertical with less movement and simple horizontal bands in the background. Diagonals are a powerful aspect to compositions so maybe try that.
Lastly, and this is the obligatory "have you done thumbnails?" bit, maybe going back to the drawing board, but trying out something different in terms of pose and action and comp could bring something a bit more unique to your depiction
Hope that helps!
One of the issues I see is with the pose / gesture itself. Foreshortening is key when it comes to showing off that dynamic movement and right now I think there are some slight foreshortening issues with the foreground arm and the rear leg.
Also be extra careful about limbs that are hidden by the body or something else, like that raised arm as they can really muddy up the silhouette and feel a bit disconnected quite easily. Sometimes just moving a bit of an elbow or forearm into view can help. I find that your pose could read much better by paying attention to that.
In general feedback I find that your composition and pose are quite similar to the splash art for Olaf, but dialed down in power quite a bit. The bulkiness aspect is really about relative proportions. So again looking at the image below, note the distinct V shape of the trapezius and general ratio of shoulder to hip width which I think is much more exaggerated than in yours.
Note the foreshortening and dynamic diagonal comp (though to be honest I'm not sure the artist nailed that foreground arm completely). Your comp is much more vertical with less movement and simple horizontal bands in the background. Diagonals are a powerful aspect to compositions so maybe try that.
Lastly, and this is the obligatory "have you done thumbnails?" bit, maybe going back to the drawing board, but trying out something different in terms of pose and action and comp could bring something a bit more unique to your depiction
Hope that helps!