The Sketchy Sketchbook of ....Sketchyness!!

[EduardoGaray]

The more i look at your Katawa shoujo piece the more i like the composition, maybe because that moment in the story was so fucking perfect. xD And you captured it perfectly, so yeah, maybe start anew but keep this one as reference. This time pose the characters with a 3d program or look for photo reference and thats it, you got an awesome tribute there.
If you start working after gathering good ref and the characters still look weird, keep doing studies of the clothing the characters are doing, over and over. You can even try wearing something similar to understand better how that clothing works. (Lucky for you she isnt wearing a dress! haha jk)

Oh the materials from the ctrl paint assigment look good, you got the edges perfectly, just keep doing those and remember using different edges when painting.
Since i sold my ps3 and traded it for a vita i wont be able to play spec ops any time soon, but now i'm interested again haha.

Keep those studies man! the gestures look too.