03-13-2015, 07:00 PM
Heya Freyja, did a paintover, or paint redo.
I think you had perspective issues. I flattened out the perspective a bit more. I separated the foreground and background/midground even further. I also added a close foreground element (bushes) to create more depth.
Your figure needs anatomy and proportion work. The blurry things, I imagined as drones of some sort, so I made them clearer. I also added focal points which your piece was lacking. These are the circles in the lower image with the coloured lines on it below. The figure, the castle thing in the distance and the near bush. You can keep breaking up your canvas with the rule of thirds to get more than one focal point in a painting.
Notice also that the 3 focal points create a triangle that allows the eye to move around the painting yet keep it within the canvas. When I was doing the painting, all elements were designed to help drive this triangle. The bush points towards the castle. The slope of the foreground hill points from the bush to the figure. The river and the midground hills flow from the figure to the castle. etc.
Also added your original as an attachment. It makes it easier for people browsing the thread :)
Hope that helps
I think you had perspective issues. I flattened out the perspective a bit more. I separated the foreground and background/midground even further. I also added a close foreground element (bushes) to create more depth.
Your figure needs anatomy and proportion work. The blurry things, I imagined as drones of some sort, so I made them clearer. I also added focal points which your piece was lacking. These are the circles in the lower image with the coloured lines on it below. The figure, the castle thing in the distance and the near bush. You can keep breaking up your canvas with the rule of thirds to get more than one focal point in a painting.
Notice also that the 3 focal points create a triangle that allows the eye to move around the painting yet keep it within the canvas. When I was doing the painting, all elements were designed to help drive this triangle. The bush points towards the castle. The slope of the foreground hill points from the bush to the figure. The river and the midground hills flow from the figure to the castle. etc.
Also added your original as an attachment. It makes it easier for people browsing the thread :)
Hope that helps