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I would have to agree about both lamp posts in the foreground. They are very distracting and take away from the main focus of the fight. An odd suggestion, but maybe take one of those pieces of paper that is on the ground under spidey and bring it to the extreme foreground like it is flying into the viewer from all the excitement.

Secondly the pose of spidey seems very awkward to me. My eye cannot discern the weight placement, even if he is moving/flying backwards pretty quickly. Is his right foot on the dirt mound? Or is it floating above the dirt mound. Is his left arm/hand in front of that right foot, and is it supporting weight or no? Perhaps put that arm behind the left leg like he is trying to gain his balance by supporting his weight on the left hand. His pose at the moment looks like he is doing an awkward forwards movement rather than a falling/jumping backwards movement. I would suggest for good reference try out the movement yourself and see how your weight feels...annnd check out come clips of capoeira practitioners or gymnasts to see how they mess with their weight on their hands.

Phew...long winded am I, yes, yes ;)

edit: this may help too (for the pose at least)

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Thumbnail Crit - by Elmst - 06-06-2013, 11:08 AM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by arden - 06-06-2013, 12:26 PM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Amit Dutta - 06-06-2013, 08:33 PM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Elmst - 06-07-2013, 12:17 AM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Elmst - 06-10-2013, 01:16 AM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Amit Dutta - 06-10-2013, 06:37 PM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by arden - 06-12-2013, 12:30 AM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Elmst - 06-12-2013, 12:24 PM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Elmst - 07-05-2013, 11:39 AM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Elmst - 07-06-2013, 01:42 PM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Madzia - 07-07-2013, 03:57 AM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Elmst - 07-08-2013, 01:23 PM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Tetsuo - 07-09-2013, 04:34 AM
RE: Thumbnail Crit - by Elmst - 07-18-2013, 01:46 PM

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