09-21-2013, 07:47 PM
I'd say push the perspective in the building a bit more...can't tell but it looks flat on. And think about more depth layers , don't render till you nail the composition and all the major elements or you'll end up right back where you started....blah blah I feel like I'm repeating myself a bit. Just push this one through.
What might help you for the next one is maybe to try not jumping into a value sketch/thumb right away but just trying out some really basic line drawing/sketching. You can usually iterate through 10 or more in an hour easy. Composition first no value. And work on a small canvas so you aren't tempted to add detail. If you can literally just use a few lines to block out major elements it keep you thinking on the larger picture. I have started doing this with my own process and I find it quite helpful. The sketch can just be shorthand or you can get quite detailed, and you can easily transition to value blocking.
The one on the left shows the final, and you can see that I did change things as I went, but for the most part the main elements that were in the original 10 minute sketch carried through in to the final, though seeing them all together now I still prefer much of the dynamism of the orignal sketch and interim stage which shows I probably should have checked back and stuck to the original a bit more.
The one on the right is very recent...really rough and I will still need to resolve issues with composition at this stage because not everthing I want to show is in there. I blocked out the values in literally 2 minutes, I could experiment with lots of different lighting at this stage. Anything further would just be adding detail.
What might help you for the next one is maybe to try not jumping into a value sketch/thumb right away but just trying out some really basic line drawing/sketching. You can usually iterate through 10 or more in an hour easy. Composition first no value. And work on a small canvas so you aren't tempted to add detail. If you can literally just use a few lines to block out major elements it keep you thinking on the larger picture. I have started doing this with my own process and I find it quite helpful. The sketch can just be shorthand or you can get quite detailed, and you can easily transition to value blocking.
The one on the left shows the final, and you can see that I did change things as I went, but for the most part the main elements that were in the original 10 minute sketch carried through in to the final, though seeing them all together now I still prefer much of the dynamism of the orignal sketch and interim stage which shows I probably should have checked back and stuck to the original a bit more.
The one on the right is very recent...really rough and I will still need to resolve issues with composition at this stage because not everthing I want to show is in there. I blocked out the values in literally 2 minutes, I could experiment with lots of different lighting at this stage. Anything further would just be adding detail.