11-13-2019, 10:24 PM
Good to see you taking more time on a single study and its lookin better. There are many inconsistencies of proportion between yours and Jeffs, it will always be most noticeable in the facial features. But comparing the two I notice that the left arm should lean inwards more towards the body, the back should be more slanted, right trap should be raised a bit more, hand looks like you didn't put much care into drawing it yet compared to the rest of the drawing.
Line quality. Note the direction of Jeff's hatching lines, when they curve a bit to wrap around the form. Try to emulate how he changes the direction of the hatching to suggest the turning of the forms of the figure. Also how often are you sharpening your pencil? I find that my hatching gets messy and blurry if I don't keep my pencil sharpened to a fine taper.
Line quality. Note the direction of Jeff's hatching lines, when they curve a bit to wrap around the form. Try to emulate how he changes the direction of the hatching to suggest the turning of the forms of the figure. Also how often are you sharpening your pencil? I find that my hatching gets messy and blurry if I don't keep my pencil sharpened to a fine taper.