seeking critique on this invironment

[gumby]

Here it goes !

thank you :)

[JonHop]

You have a really nice piece here but I think the main problem is the left part of the image is vying for attention when the main focus should be the right. I did a quick crop of the image to show what I mean. If you look at it cropped you have a more balanced contrast between the oranges and blues and overall I feel you have a nicer composisition like this. It makes the viewer imagine what could be around this area instead of you painting the whole area.

Other than that I'd maybe get some ref for the girls silhouette and compare it with yours.

Hope this was of some help to you.