Ben Nissen's SKETCHBOOK

[darktiste]

I would have to agree that focal point would improve your piece for example on the girl with a shoulder armor the armor piece level of detail absolutely destroy the focal point by simplifying the armor complexity you would have more chance for the face to be the focal point which generally happen to be the center of interest in a frame shoulder shot.

You get great form i just thought maybe you could give them more ''expressiveness''

Lastly for the collar bone i would say if you want more realism i suggest you study it because right now i find your going to soft on it.