12-07-2013, 09:13 PM
Hey, nice start to an enviro.
As a first point, until I read your description I didn't really notice there was a fortress there at all. It's still kinda hard to make out exactly whats fortress and whats mountain. So I would alter the temp/value a bit for that.
Also you have some nice contrast in the river leading the eye towards the VP, but reward us with something for following the river, put something out there that points back to the fortress and it will really help the composition.
Another composition point is that you could use where the light is breaking through and illuminating the upper part of that slope to make a graphic shape that points back to the fortress, maybe increase the chroma on the slope so it reads a bit faster.
Also some people would help pull in the viewer aswell, and help with the lack of story maybe.
Good palette though, some nice colour combinations and good mood.
As a first point, until I read your description I didn't really notice there was a fortress there at all. It's still kinda hard to make out exactly whats fortress and whats mountain. So I would alter the temp/value a bit for that.
Also you have some nice contrast in the river leading the eye towards the VP, but reward us with something for following the river, put something out there that points back to the fortress and it will really help the composition.
Another composition point is that you could use where the light is breaking through and illuminating the upper part of that slope to make a graphic shape that points back to the fortress, maybe increase the chroma on the slope so it reads a bit faster.
Also some people would help pull in the viewer aswell, and help with the lack of story maybe.
Good palette though, some nice colour combinations and good mood.