06-15-2016, 02:47 AM
(06-14-2016, 11:57 AM)JyonnyNovice Wrote: awesome, much better ^^ just wondering if you need to say corpulent wiener in the last panel? feels a bit like it's there to justify the title, but I don't think it needs justifying since the subject is pretty clear. Feels like something typically lewd could work better 'yea you know you love it' or whatever (or something funnier). Just my thoughts again, feel free to ignore anything I add, it's all subjective ^^
Yeh, I will probably change that last part. yeh, I kinda put it in if the viewer wasn't sure of the context. But now that I read it it seems way too unatural. Thanks for the feedback again Jyonny.