Rotohail's "Reclusive" SketchBook

[Fedodika]

hey roto... i love your work, i guess i'll give a critique since im appreciating the advanced level youre getting to;

http://crimsondaggers.com/forum/attachme...oup_02.png

This critique doesnt apply to this^, the story and mood is there. However, she could be more welcoming, maybe hip out, hands on hip, head cocked to one side.

So a lot of your stuff is like, "thats nice, thats cool, nice shape." etc. But i dont sense a feeling of story or interaction between the characters. Now a character can interact with themself, which is why say they have a weapon, or they are an athlete, etc. Throwing a punch is a good story, and you push that but what im encouraging is to push it further

http://crimsondaggers.com/forum/attachme...&anger.png

See this screaming guy; why's he screaming? how could you push that idea to make it more like the narrative he's displaying. He's angry, hunched over, arms spread out. He's beastlike, maybe on all fours, try to work in some foreshortening. The lady next to him looks bored, but she could more bored. Being bored is a story in itself. How do you show someone looking really really bored? hand on their cheek? slouching, indifferent expression, rolling their eyes.

Things are becoming less of a technical exercise for you at this point and youre ready to say something, but i know its tough to decide what to say. Ive been recently enjoying Force Drawing with Matessi on his website; its teaching me a lot about sending power through a drawing, as well as a narrative; its really interesting stuff!

Alot of your characters have good expressions and you can still push them, even the ones that seem whacky already

http://crimsondaggers.com/forum/attachme...onster.png

Like this guy, why stop there? his mouth could be open, his tongue lunging out; further, he could be in a pose that sells the story of his long hair, right now its just a purple ball with a funny face and long hair standing. I know a lot of this takes a lot of abstract thought, but it really sells stuff in a different way. Animators are masters at it, taking a pose and pushing the very essence of everything it expresses... Worth studying, even if youre just observing casually.

Keep pummeling deez hoez roto