06-16-2020, 08:08 AM
Hello graphicnovelist. I know less about how to draw comics than most people on this forum, but I think your framing and composition is generally OK. The page flows well and is easy to understand.
It would be easier to give a critique if you tell us about what sort of style or effect you're aiming for. But even then, it may be most productive to closely examine the works of whomever your favorite comic artists are, and see how they handled similar scenes.
Then, if something is bothering you about your works still, it most likely means that you just need to improve your fundamental skills overall in order to create the kind of art you want. Just keep practicing!
It would be easier to give a critique if you tell us about what sort of style or effect you're aiming for. But even then, it may be most productive to closely examine the works of whomever your favorite comic artists are, and see how they handled similar scenes.
Then, if something is bothering you about your works still, it most likely means that you just need to improve your fundamental skills overall in order to create the kind of art you want. Just keep practicing!