04-12-2013, 01:03 PM
Nice, paced well, some nice touches in there...the taking a dump bit was funny. It becomes confusing once the thrasher appears. What is it? Didn't know who the grenades bounced off at first, or who pulled him into car at the end. I'm sure you know and the art would show it but i guess you just need to put in more description for other readers. Always an issue when you are going to be doing the illustrating since it's like you're telling it to yourself....but it is a good exercise in showing the key points to get across.
One issue to maybe think about is setting context I'm not sure you show enough of when/where this is supposed to be, but again that may come later in future issues but it might be good to tweak the interest of people by the larger context....
Good work, so I guess this is a fairly large scale multiple issue comic?
One issue to maybe think about is setting context I'm not sure you show enough of when/where this is supposed to be, but again that may come later in future issues but it might be good to tweak the interest of people by the larger context....
Good work, so I guess this is a fairly large scale multiple issue comic?