11-02-2015, 09:53 PM
Mariyan Yea I get you totally, the pacing isn't ideal, probably also because the squirrel is drawn with textured fur on a background with three values and the figures are pretty flat line / 2 value backgrounds. The style is different so probably stands out for that reason. I will develop the control and sensitivity to prevent that kinda stuff someday : )
Lurch Thanks for the comments, definitely some kind of unifying element could work. My girl suggested having the snowflakes falling in all the frames and not just the last two.
As long as you guys got the point of the comic though, which I think you did? That the first four panels are the imagination / memory of the girl at the end? Aesthetics aside, as long as that reads I can feel it was a success. (do let me know if you did / didn't get that!)
Lurch Thanks for the comments, definitely some kind of unifying element could work. My girl suggested having the snowflakes falling in all the frames and not just the last two.
As long as you guys got the point of the comic though, which I think you did? That the first four panels are the imagination / memory of the girl at the end? Aesthetics aside, as long as that reads I can feel it was a success. (do let me know if you did / didn't get that!)