08-31-2022, 07:12 AM
Personally i am not a fan of how busy the ground element are very blocky and alot of busyness and why always the verticality of the piece(you should try horizontal sometime)
On an other note the stair bloc shape they sit on two different level so it bottom side shouldn't be alligning since they don't occupy the same level in the x y z space since one block sit on side on the edge of what look like a very shallow bassin and the other block is resting in what i assume is the outside edge of the bassin around it which is lower.That unless they have different size in that case it would make sense.But i assume since it seem to be block base they would be similar in size.
To add to this complex situation there a center block missing so i don't understand how it can support the full weight of both without tipping over.Sadly due to the verticality you don't have the opportunity to make it into a full stair it would considerably change the scene.
I don't like how the pillar intersect the bassin.But i see why it in an odd place and why you tried to include it so the top of the pillar can create flow toward the comet but i don't think it necessary when the character point at the object and specially if you get rid of much of what in the top section of the painting like suggestesd in the POV.The contrast in detail of the lower section(busy) of the pov with the emptiness of the top portion direct the eye and instead of element creating the flow it the contrast that move the eye.
Personally you receive amazing feed back that should fix those mention problem so i think it just a question of do you have the patience do redo the line art i personally think storytelling as to be very strong and this POV seem to give you just that.I certainly understand that changing direction and taking someone else direction seem like loosing control over your own process so i am perfectly fine with you trying to fix rather than picking where someone left.But i would say if there major issue it never wrong to go back and keep doing thumbnail specially if there isn't deadline.The trap in those case is learning to finish and not overworking the piece.
I am just unsure about how much of the women face we will be able to capture if you go the POV route and since face are important to tell story it the only concern i can raise if you want to try that route.
On an other note the stair bloc shape they sit on two different level so it bottom side shouldn't be alligning since they don't occupy the same level in the x y z space since one block sit on side on the edge of what look like a very shallow bassin and the other block is resting in what i assume is the outside edge of the bassin around it which is lower.That unless they have different size in that case it would make sense.But i assume since it seem to be block base they would be similar in size.
To add to this complex situation there a center block missing so i don't understand how it can support the full weight of both without tipping over.Sadly due to the verticality you don't have the opportunity to make it into a full stair it would considerably change the scene.
I don't like how the pillar intersect the bassin.But i see why it in an odd place and why you tried to include it so the top of the pillar can create flow toward the comet but i don't think it necessary when the character point at the object and specially if you get rid of much of what in the top section of the painting like suggestesd in the POV.The contrast in detail of the lower section(busy) of the pov with the emptiness of the top portion direct the eye and instead of element creating the flow it the contrast that move the eye.
Personally you receive amazing feed back that should fix those mention problem so i think it just a question of do you have the patience do redo the line art i personally think storytelling as to be very strong and this POV seem to give you just that.I certainly understand that changing direction and taking someone else direction seem like loosing control over your own process so i am perfectly fine with you trying to fix rather than picking where someone left.But i would say if there major issue it never wrong to go back and keep doing thumbnail specially if there isn't deadline.The trap in those case is learning to finish and not overworking the piece.
I am just unsure about how much of the women face we will be able to capture if you go the POV route and since face are important to tell story it the only concern i can raise if you want to try that route.
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Teamwork make your dream work.
Asking help is the key to growth.