05-27-2016, 05:43 AM
You have something good going here, so don't lose sight of the big picture. The falling sand made a lot of sense as a compositional element because it broke up the composition and created a tangent to where the characters were looking so it didn't feel ike they were staring into nothing. Even if it wasn't quite in perspective it was a good idea to have it there. Maybe you could make your composition even wider, and make room for your characters to look at something in the foreground. I really should be working on my own final right now, but I couldn't resist the urge to fiddle with your comp some more. I hope you don't mind.
