06-14-2016, 04:30 AM
I think the narrative works ok - the thief is sneaking into bun stuffers, gets punched and knocked down, then we see the one who punched him is that big hot dog. The reading order of the last few panels feels a bit unclear to me too but, I believe its the small panel > big panel > small panel since the way the horizon line then the hot dog's pointing hand. If that's the intended way, I think it's ok, since the dialogue will make sense and the reader won't get confused.
But it could be a good idea to storm a few more anyway, because you create something that you like much more, after digging deeper into your mind ^^ Have a look at some comic reference for ideas too.
But it could be a good idea to storm a few more anyway, because you create something that you like much more, after digging deeper into your mind ^^ Have a look at some comic reference for ideas too.