06-18-2016, 01:11 PM
It's looking good! I really like how the last panel links back to the first one with the thought bubbles, it's a really neat idea and makes a nice circular thing between his dream and his daydream. I think you have a good thing going. Couple things you could do to make it more fluid (it's all just my opinion so don't take notice if it doesn't suit you) - have the bullies sat towards the back of the class, right now they're at the front and the teacher is there? It makes it feel unnatural that they'd be throwing something back at him. I think there are enough clues that it's in class without the teacher. If possible you could have the back of the main characters head in that same shot (could make him easily recognized by his hair if it's distinctive or even solid black) . Other thing perhaps have him wearing pyjamas in that second panel, so we know it's a different location - right now it feels like he could already be at school. If the mums dialogue throws it she could say something about he's gonna be late or something. Looking forward to seeing how it turns out!