Tfantoni's Sketchbook

[darktiste]

I am not a big fan of the weapon due to how i see it as subliminally point out of the composition.Also be mindful that the more an object approch an edge the more it tend to mess with the viewer.It ok to have object that are out of frame but try to avoid object that create tangente with the frame itself it a big no no in many artist book.Also avoid line going toward directly throught one of the four corner of the frame it not the case here but i just want to mention it as a bonus tips.For me if anything here what i see as an opportunity is to utilize the concept of foreshortening in every element for example maybe trying to create and even more foreshorting pose for that gun so it almost like it point at the viewer.Like Zorrentos said any loose fabric you could add will really help sell a feeling of movement.Maybe also add bullet flying like it a matrix scene type vibe.Bullet impacting and explosing the element in the scene that would add an other element of story.It those little attention to detail that pay in the end.