01-09-2023, 03:05 AM
It dramatic but i wish there was more foreshorten as if she was almost falling over a little more toward the viewer in a anti clock wise direction from the men perspective failling more than she is now so we could see her expression and the one of the men also and i would probably zoom much more as i feel the action is very intimate and would benefit from that i believe.At moment is almost look more like a r*pe because we are missing much of the expression and the hand seem to suggest a struggle.
Right now i am have a problem with the tree in the colored version i am not sure if it coming out of her or if it behind her and where the trunk is if that a tree behind her?I think that might be why you choose that angle so as not to create to much overlap with the truck but in that case it hard to tell what going on as we don't see where it coming out of...
In term of composition the tree doesn't help the composition in the current compositio i would argue it lead the eye outside the canva try to make the branch curve toward the subject a little more to create a flow that cycle around the piece.
Both foot don't look like they are really holding is weight they look like after thought at moment
I think the cropped version i provided(no PO what so ever) as even more of that classical look it almost look like a sculpture once you remove the background that i believe doesn't really contribute to the story that much.It obviously not following any of the advise i gave but it still an alternative to the herculean task i have in mind for you.
I really which we could see you be looser in the sketch phase i like the confidence i am just not sure if it serving you to be that commited. The problem i see and tell me if i am wrong is how you would be able to foresee any problem if you don't try anything beyond the first it almost as if you don't want to try to bother you want it to flow but there a difference between a well thought composition and star allign on the the first try. Again i am from a concept art perspective but i don't understand why you prefer spending 6 hour more on something if it not to have a resolve composition. I understand the urge to draw.But i also urge you to think not saying you don't.
You don't need a ton of iteration but i think it good to have option maybe 1 to 12 of them and the key really is the small size they shouldn't take long it really more about composition and gesture you do alot of the value thumbnail but i feel that the easy answers to ''let give them what they want'' you don't do this for me.I think thumbnailling that what can really help you push and be more considerate in your choose so that there is a lot less space for question right now i feel like i got space for critic because you don't as much preliminary exploration and i question if i am contributing to much for your own good.But again i am also ask myself why i am asking that of you.I am helping or not...
I wish you all the best you know that.
Right now i am have a problem with the tree in the colored version i am not sure if it coming out of her or if it behind her and where the trunk is if that a tree behind her?I think that might be why you choose that angle so as not to create to much overlap with the truck but in that case it hard to tell what going on as we don't see where it coming out of...
In term of composition the tree doesn't help the composition in the current compositio i would argue it lead the eye outside the canva try to make the branch curve toward the subject a little more to create a flow that cycle around the piece.
Both foot don't look like they are really holding is weight they look like after thought at moment
I think the cropped version i provided(no PO what so ever) as even more of that classical look it almost look like a sculpture once you remove the background that i believe doesn't really contribute to the story that much.It obviously not following any of the advise i gave but it still an alternative to the herculean task i have in mind for you.
I really which we could see you be looser in the sketch phase i like the confidence i am just not sure if it serving you to be that commited. The problem i see and tell me if i am wrong is how you would be able to foresee any problem if you don't try anything beyond the first it almost as if you don't want to try to bother you want it to flow but there a difference between a well thought composition and star allign on the the first try. Again i am from a concept art perspective but i don't understand why you prefer spending 6 hour more on something if it not to have a resolve composition. I understand the urge to draw.But i also urge you to think not saying you don't.
You don't need a ton of iteration but i think it good to have option maybe 1 to 12 of them and the key really is the small size they shouldn't take long it really more about composition and gesture you do alot of the value thumbnail but i feel that the easy answers to ''let give them what they want'' you don't do this for me.I think thumbnailling that what can really help you push and be more considerate in your choose so that there is a lot less space for question right now i feel like i got space for critic because you don't as much preliminary exploration and i question if i am contributing to much for your own good.But again i am also ask myself why i am asking that of you.I am helping or not...
I wish you all the best you know that.