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[Ortani]

I feel the hand could still use more crease where the joint are.

The value are getting a lil more define but the bustier still leak the roundness that i would expect of something that wrap tightly around the body.

I am not sure if it the eye that need to be move or the mouth that out of perspective but a quick try to see what should be adjusted is a quick lasso tool or to use the liquify tool if you got that in your tool option it can help reshape some feature but you might need to redraw them if they are to out of perspective.

One other detail that kinda bother me is how much of the ear anatomy is missing to even call that a ear more reference of other work would be suggested or just more anatomy study to fill your visual library.

Also glass tend to deform what behind the glass because they might have slight curvature so when light pass it get bent so her cheek is behind the glass it can deform unless those glass are just for protection which i doubt.

For the pose i think it a bit hard to read what she gripping if the pose of the leg would have been work a lil more in the composition stage i think you would have achieve better read. So yeah i really wanna say that i feel if you want to put anything in your portfolio i think you really need to step up the pre work otherwise you really betting on a homerun on the first attempt and i think that kinda take years of work to achieve this kind of consistence.

Remember that you also have to be able to take a outside view on your work. You know the choose you made and what everything is in the scene but you cant assume the viewer will see thing as clearly as you do that why you want to exaggerate to a degree.

Okay! I tried to take a whack at it again with what you said in mind, I do feel there could be more improvement with the creases of the bustier but I'd like to move on from this piece :)

Things that changed compared to the last update:

• Added more creases to the bustier.
• Moved her eyes closer together.
• Slightly deformed/shaped the lips (I also just noticed the philtrum doesn't connect properly to the lips :')  )
• Added creases to the fingers.
• Slightly moved the cheek behind the glasses to the right. (I'm going to assume she has a weak prescription lol)
• Added a helix to the ears.

In the future I'll definitely practice composition / readability.

I really appreciate you putting in the time to critique my work, I love hearing other peoples feedback and use those opportunities to improve my art and learn something new!

This artwork isn't intended to be a portfolio piece, this is mostly for fun as I enjoy painting other artists OC's. I thought this might be the only appropriate thread to post it on as it's a bit more polished than the work I put in my sketchbook, if I post another piece that's intended to be for a portfolio I will be sure to mention it :D 

If there is a better thread I could be posting this type of artwork on, please let me know, cheers!