11-27-2012, 05:05 PM
(11-27-2012, 12:50 PM)monkeybread Wrote: Dude, that is so much more dynamic...you've really pushed the triangle comp idea and that thing is so much more freaky now that it is starting to inhabit the space well. I also really love the space under her feet, as if she is far above or separated from any safe base. Couple of things with this: you've started building in a lighting scheme (love your subtle treatment of light, you do have a good understanding of how it works) but at the moment there is still quite a fair amount of ambient in there. You might want to be thinking about making use of a slightly stronger directionality or shadow scheme to amp up the sense of drama and horror. I think the creature partly in the shadows could work very well and create some interesting shape to your composition. You could also think about secondary lighting and what this source may be to add some accent and variation to your scheme.
In terms of the girl the anatomy and proportions are great. I like the head on aspect of the girl but wonder if a little bit of twist to her body or a tilt to her head might make it just a little more dynamic and interactive with the beast. At the moment she seems a bit too relaxed in a way. Also her expression is pretty neutral at the moment which doesn't really add anything to the narrative of what is supposed to be going on.
You're onto a good start; you took on crit and really improved so I can say this in all honesty, that defeatist attitude doesn't suit you! :) Do yourself a favour and be determined to push through and finish this. I can totally see it finished and it looks awesome. Just keep going!
Ahhhhh! Thanks man! I'll work this piece a bit more to drive the narrative even further. These crits are really helping me drive towards a specific goal for the painting and I absolutely appreciate it, sir!