10-30-2015, 09:03 PM
I am writing a script right now for a TV pilot so I'll probably use that for the notan and values. I have already done quite a bunch of 2 different environments, but I'm gonna do more, then select for value sketches and then selectt the value sketches I like the most.
Adam, amazing story! The variety of environments is very good, but it might break the sotry in itself? I mean, they have this objective and bang, suddenly they appear on a portal on a cyberpunk city in the future.. and then they go the past.. and they forget their objective :P
But I love it, though. I would do this:
Their time > Priests to the portal > Prehistoric > Find the cure > Return to the portal > Return to their time
On the first, you could show the palace, a city, etc.
On the last (which is on the same time as the first) you could show a more natural setting, with mountains, rivers, abandoned bridges..
On the preshistoric thing, well, as the tagline for a very known videogames company says.. History is our playground :)
Adam, amazing story! The variety of environments is very good, but it might break the sotry in itself? I mean, they have this objective and bang, suddenly they appear on a portal on a cyberpunk city in the future.. and then they go the past.. and they forget their objective :P
But I love it, though. I would do this:
Their time > Priests to the portal > Prehistoric > Find the cure > Return to the portal > Return to their time
On the first, you could show the palace, a city, etc.
On the last (which is on the same time as the first) you could show a more natural setting, with mountains, rivers, abandoned bridges..
On the preshistoric thing, well, as the tagline for a very known videogames company says.. History is our playground :)
would you like me to improve? check my SKETCHBOOK! 
