09-18-2015, 11:30 AM
Your sense of 3D form is showing through in your painting, and that's good! There is a work-in-progress feel to your painting, and it's more like a drawing than a painting. The background lines feels sloopy because there're too many of them in too many different length and curves... they look liek speghetti, basically. The fuzzy, blurry eraser at the bottom is too digidal feel, it just doesn't look good. If you want to take a brush and just erase out a fading edge, use something with more scatter and varying shapes, and don't leave the black outline untouched. THe black outline stands too far apart from the rest of the lines They can use some variation in thickness and darkness and transparency - what we call line weight. Hope that helps :)