04-20-2013, 10:18 AM
Yolo- That was a great crit. The observation about the tragedy was something I overlooked. Sort of easy to have a cold objective take on such foreign characters as if they are just expendable pikmen. I saw more of a herd thinning than a tragedy.
One thing that I'd like to see in terms of mood, is the event to feel tragic, without being winey. I like the idea of closing on the optimistic note of "some of us survived" as opposed to "most of us are dead".
The storymind youtube thing is great to listen to while drawing. It has already taught me about my misconception of the roles of antagonist and protagonist.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=unhRTIN4bY4
One thing that I'd like to see in terms of mood, is the event to feel tragic, without being winey. I like the idea of closing on the optimistic note of "some of us survived" as opposed to "most of us are dead".
The storymind youtube thing is great to listen to while drawing. It has already taught me about my misconception of the roles of antagonist and protagonist.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=unhRTIN4bY4