01-29-2012, 01:05 AM
Hey.
I hope you don't mind, here is a bit of feedback where I pretty much just focus on problems.
...I try to avoid bullshit advice, but it can happen.
As I see it, your main problem is space. Your piece looks crammed and it screws up the composition.
Everything seems to be sitting in the foreground. The gorilla on the right is even lit as if the torch light is sitting right beside him. And the other guy ends up hugging the edge of your image.
If you start thinking more with depth/perspective I bet your pieces will get better. (foreground, middleground, background...but also rendering characters less flat)
Another thing is that regions with high contrasts are pretty scattered throughout your piece. Reinforcing that it's pretty crammed and messy. Decide on one main focal point and then maybe have a few smaller ones with less impact.
some smaller stuff:
- The smoke of his cigar and the fire of the torch go different directions
- The fur of the gorilla on the left is inconsistent (head, body -> different color)
- Why is he holding a stick?
- The anatomy of the guy on and left and right is not the same. (especially the nose) The one on the right looks referenced
- ear of the guy on left needs to move more to the back of his head
I also made a little paintover. Everything is scaled down to focus on the composition. I admit there are a lot of things wrong in my piece as well.
![[Image: 45YBz.jpg]](http://i.imgur.com/45YBz.jpg)
I put the big guy in the background functioning as the sky. I used color perspective to add depth as well(foreground orange, background blue).
The guy with the torch got smaller so that the fire doesn't screw up the composition as much. Added the skull as part of the environment.
I hope this helped somewhat.
I hope you don't mind, here is a bit of feedback where I pretty much just focus on problems.
...I try to avoid bullshit advice, but it can happen.
As I see it, your main problem is space. Your piece looks crammed and it screws up the composition.
Everything seems to be sitting in the foreground. The gorilla on the right is even lit as if the torch light is sitting right beside him. And the other guy ends up hugging the edge of your image.
If you start thinking more with depth/perspective I bet your pieces will get better. (foreground, middleground, background...but also rendering characters less flat)
Another thing is that regions with high contrasts are pretty scattered throughout your piece. Reinforcing that it's pretty crammed and messy. Decide on one main focal point and then maybe have a few smaller ones with less impact.
some smaller stuff:
- The smoke of his cigar and the fire of the torch go different directions
- The fur of the gorilla on the left is inconsistent (head, body -> different color)
- Why is he holding a stick?
- The anatomy of the guy on and left and right is not the same. (especially the nose) The one on the right looks referenced
- ear of the guy on left needs to move more to the back of his head
I also made a little paintover. Everything is scaled down to focus on the composition. I admit there are a lot of things wrong in my piece as well.
I put the big guy in the background functioning as the sky. I used color perspective to add depth as well(foreground orange, background blue).
The guy with the torch got smaller so that the fire doesn't screw up the composition as much. Added the skull as part of the environment.
I hope this helped somewhat.