12-31-2016, 08:20 AM
I agree with what Artloader said about having more dynamic or dramatic 'camera' angles. On the first page, panels 2 and 4 are essentially the same. Panel 2 could be an aerial view down on the cafe, zoomed out slightly, showing other tables, etc. The first panel is the 'establishing shot', the second panel could be a more specific establishing shot.
So far, page 2 is 6 identical panels, 4 of which you've drawn, are paired up, very very similar layouts within the 2 pairs. Think about how this would play out in a movie. If they are leaving, theyd ask for the check or something to start the action of leaving, then the next shot would be them stepping out of the door (the stepping out the door, being the more important element of that part of the story). So maybe the first panel of page 2, a small circle of them asking for the check (or whatever action that starts the process of leaving) then the rest of the panel is a new establishing shot of them stepping out of the cafe door. That could also be an aerial shot, based on your preference. That small circle might be enough to break up the current page layout of 6 identical panels.
Of course I'm interjecting my own preference here, but I hope it helps! Best of luck to you
So far, page 2 is 6 identical panels, 4 of which you've drawn, are paired up, very very similar layouts within the 2 pairs. Think about how this would play out in a movie. If they are leaving, theyd ask for the check or something to start the action of leaving, then the next shot would be them stepping out of the door (the stepping out the door, being the more important element of that part of the story). So maybe the first panel of page 2, a small circle of them asking for the check (or whatever action that starts the process of leaving) then the rest of the panel is a new establishing shot of them stepping out of the cafe door. That could also be an aerial shot, based on your preference. That small circle might be enough to break up the current page layout of 6 identical panels.
Of course I'm interjecting my own preference here, but I hope it helps! Best of luck to you
