01-14-2017, 08:32 AM
I'm reluctant to critique on the one hand because I don't consider myself very knowledgeable yet from the technicalities of art standpoint, but on the other hand I do want to help. I do read a lot of comics, so I thought I'd mention a couple of things.
I love your concept first off. I think it has a lot of potential. Second off, I thought I'd mention something else about the word bubbles. Like someone else mentioned earlier, which is something I was going to bring up and it looks like you fixed, was that word bubbles usually don't extend beyond a certain panel unless the reader's eye is intentionally being directed through where the break is.
I also don't think I've seen word bubbles cut off horizontally against the sides of panels. I could be mistaken, but just to be sure I flipped through some of my comics, and it looks like if the word bubble is broken by a panel, it's almost always cut off against the top or bottom of the panel like this:
![[Image: break_zpsjgoyr9nd.jpg]](http://i839.photobucket.com/albums/zz311/Necryn/break_zpsjgoyr9nd.jpg)
Not saying it HAS to be done that way, but that seems to be the way it's done most often if a word bubble is cut off based on all the comics I read.
There's also a technique used to signify a pause between statements that's used in comics. A lot of comics do this with word bubbles:
![[Image: after_zpsj7rzzoba.jpg]](http://i839.photobucket.com/albums/zz311/Necryn/after_zpsj7rzzoba.jpg)
Though you should orchestrate it so that there would verbally be a pause between what's in the top and bottom parts of the bubble, I just wanted to be sure you knew that was an option if you needed more room for text and wanted to signify pauses in conversation between statements made by a single character. Sorry if you already knew that, I just noticed you weren't using the technique and thought it might be useful for adding a bit more to the conversation at the cafe.
May add more later if I think of more, hope that wasn't too obvious. Nervous about critiquing stuff because I'm not used to it, but I wanted to try to offer a little assistance where I could.
I love your concept first off. I think it has a lot of potential. Second off, I thought I'd mention something else about the word bubbles. Like someone else mentioned earlier, which is something I was going to bring up and it looks like you fixed, was that word bubbles usually don't extend beyond a certain panel unless the reader's eye is intentionally being directed through where the break is.
I also don't think I've seen word bubbles cut off horizontally against the sides of panels. I could be mistaken, but just to be sure I flipped through some of my comics, and it looks like if the word bubble is broken by a panel, it's almost always cut off against the top or bottom of the panel like this:
Not saying it HAS to be done that way, but that seems to be the way it's done most often if a word bubble is cut off based on all the comics I read.
There's also a technique used to signify a pause between statements that's used in comics. A lot of comics do this with word bubbles:
Though you should orchestrate it so that there would verbally be a pause between what's in the top and bottom parts of the bubble, I just wanted to be sure you knew that was an option if you needed more room for text and wanted to signify pauses in conversation between statements made by a single character. Sorry if you already knew that, I just noticed you weren't using the technique and thought it might be useful for adding a bit more to the conversation at the cafe.
May add more later if I think of more, hope that wasn't too obvious. Nervous about critiquing stuff because I'm not used to it, but I wanted to try to offer a little assistance where I could.